openskies
  • Joined on 2020-12-27
openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#6 2022-07-18 02:09:52 +00:00
The Stanley Parable

The preceding two paragraphs don't express their point very well

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#6 2022-07-18 02:09:52 +00:00
The Stanley Parable

some possible phrasing changes are

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#6 2022-07-18 02:09:52 +00:00
The Stanley Parable

OH, DID U GET THE BROOM CLOSET ENDING? THEB ROOM CLOSET ENDING WAS MY FAVRITE!1 XD

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#6 2022-07-18 02:09:52 +00:00
The Stanley Parable

I don't understand how this paragraph connects to the narrative of this post or how it improves the post by its existence.

openskies suggested changes for cadey/xesite#6 2022-07-18 02:09:52 +00:00
The Stanley Parable

here you go

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#6 2022-07-18 02:08:29 +00:00
The Stanley Parable

some possible phrasing changes are

Mechanically, it is a deeply limited game; you can only move around and interact with things. There aren't even very many interactible objects. The story is…

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

This doesn't make sense. Saying that it's rougly the same but has overall changed into something that feels different in practice doesn't mean much to me. This sentence could be removed completely.

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

I dare you to make a "Go 2 Considered Harmful" pun.

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

define "semver-breaking"

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

Combine these two sentences. Example

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

for go noobs, you should rephrase just a little bit to make it clear which is which, for example "this means importing X rather than Y"

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

You didn't set up/foreshadow this connection well enough.

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

add something to indicate that google3 isn't a typo for people who've never heard of it, like backticks or something.

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

s/semantic/semantics/

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

s/I started using Go so long ago/then/

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

s/I started using Go so long ago/then/

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

observably, objectively, demonstrably.

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

s/This worked, it wasn’t the default though/This worked, but it wasn't the default/

openskies commented on pull request cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

perhaps this should be rephrased to "their preferences are valid regardless"

openskies suggested changes for cadey/xesite#5 2022-05-14 13:15:32 +00:00
blog: we already have go 2

First half of first editing pass